I was a shy girl, walking down the almost light, claustrophobic hallway. The only light I had was the tatty, glitching, light bulb that covered 3/4 of the hallway, it didn’t scare me, I was used to it. I was scared, I froze, put my shoulder in front of my face, cowering, as if I knew that it was going to happen, the door at the end of the hall opened, but there was no one there, it sucked me in like a black hole.
I was unconscious but I was aware, where was I?
What I thought was the next day, I woke to some dark, strange, restricting place, again where was I? I realized, I was in a coffin 10 feet underground.
By Jared Baines
5 comments:
This is a really good story, Jared. Although some parts don't make sense e.g. "I wasn't scared, I was used to it. I was scared." And also if she is in the coffin how does she know how deep under ground she is?
LOVE EVA AND SAM <3
Very good punctuation and very good use of words e.g "The glitching flash light" instead of the fading flash light
From Flynn
This is a really good story, Jared. Although some parts don't make sense e.g. "I wasn't scared, I was used to it. I was scared." And also if she is in the coffin how does she know how deep under ground she is?
Joe! You just copied me and Sam's comment!
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