Monday, October 18, 2010

A Day At The Beach - Claudia

Hot sun,
Light breeze.
Sea gulls squawking,
Palm trees swaying.
Soft sand,
Hot rocks.
People talking,
Beach greenery.
The beach.


Dried seaweed,
Driftwood in the sea.
Sea life in the water,
Cold water,
Waves crashing,
Hot rocks.
Under the sea.

A fun day at the beach.


By Claudia

2 comments:

Photon's blog said...

I like how you had lots of short sentences it had a great rythm

Abbys Crib said...

Hi Claudia,

Great poem, I really liked it. The use of short sentences was very effective.
But next time I think that you could every 3 lines make a rhyme to spice it up or just to give it more flavor.

From your Poem Chefs

Lucy and Abby