Memories
Wild waves wash with wisdom,
Sand swishing swaying in silence,
The tide tumbling to my toes,
Gazing goes,
And Autumn appears,
Searching for summer,
I reappear,
Then I noticed,
In the sand,
My florescent pink board,
Outdoing the silky golden sand,
Clutching my board,
I float in the rushing water,
Thinking of my younger sister,
By Tessa
4 comments:
Wow Tess. What an amazing poetry. I loved the use of alteration like ‘wild waves wash with wisdom’. It made me paint a beautiful picture of the beach in my head. You are a fantastic writer and Jamie and I hope to see more of your poetry.
Jamie and Verity
Great poem Tessa, I like the part where it says "The tide tumbling to my toes,
Gazing goes,
And Autumn appears,
Searching for summer,
I reappear,"
you have some great rhymes and a good sense of words, well done!
Hi Tess,
I really enjoyed your spicy poem.
It was really cooking!
I love how your first paragraph contains lots of scrumptious alliteration. It really made my mouth water. Next time I think you should stick with your delicious alliteration recipes throughout the whole poem, but overall I think you are developing into a MasterChef in the Language position.
From your Poem Chefs,
Lucy and Abby
AMAZING!! I love the alliteration/rhyming it makes it so much more.
great work
Oscar
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